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Offline MH Johnson

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Thank you for your feedback so far, everyone!

My artist and I have done our best to incorporate the excellent typography (and sword placement) insights others have given so far, and we hope that you will enjoy the final 2 variations we've come up with for the design! (young adult/epic fantasy)  - As always I'd love your feedback, and here's to a wonderful and profitable 2018 for all of us!


                                 






                                                                 


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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #1 on: November 24, 2017, 10:41:34 PM »
I really like it. The two suggestions I would offer are: 1) get rid of that yellow outline around your author name, and 2) move your author name up to sit under the title so it doesn't block the dragon's nose and the gold.
     

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« Reply #2 on: November 24, 2017, 11:04:51 PM »
I really like it. The two suggestions I would offer are: 1) get rid of that yellow outline around your author name, and 2) move your author name up to sit under the title so it doesn't block the dragon's nose and the gold.

Seconded. Really pretty cover!
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« Reply #3 on: November 24, 2017, 11:09:53 PM »
It's a solid piece of art. The typography could be improved. But, uh, the position of the sword is somewhat ... painful?

 :P I didn't notice & now I can't look away!
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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #4 on: November 24, 2017, 11:12:23 PM »
What a great illustration!


The title disappears in the thumbnail version.  I'd suggest a darker font against the light sky, perhaps? 


I don't know.  Best of luck with it, you've obviously got a great starting image here!  :)

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« Reply #5 on: November 25, 2017, 12:26:27 AM »
I really like it. The two suggestions I would offer are: 1) get rid of that yellow outline around your author name, and 2) move your author name up to sit under the title so it doesn't block the dragon's nose and the gold.

I agree with Shayne.  You don't want to obstruct the dragon's face.

Your artwork conveys the light tone well.
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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #6 on: November 25, 2017, 04:07:13 AM »
Four young explorers... disguise themselves as knights for a series of epic adventures! Because why eat people when you can trade with them?

Your explanation of the plot makes no sense to me and has several disjointed and disconnected ideas: Explorers disguise themselves as knights so they don't eat the people that they meet and can trade with them.

Uh...

"Explorers" implies humans, not human-eating creatures.

"Knights" are warriors and soldiers, not merchants or tradesmen.

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« Reply #7 on: November 25, 2017, 04:25:42 AM »
Your explanation of the plot makes no sense to me and has several disjointed and disconnected ideas: Explorers disguise themselves as knights so they don't eat the people that they meet and can trade with them.

Uh...

"Explorers" implies humans, not human-eating creatures.

"Knights" are warriors and soldiers, not merchants or tradesmen.

You make good points! So let me explain... I was being cute :) They are dragons that turn to boys and, as far as their family is concerned, enjoy 'playing with dinner' FAR too much for their own good! Then when Sorn falls in love with a princes.. you get the idea!


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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #8 on: November 25, 2017, 04:40:07 AM »
Nice cover. Personally, I would darken the image just a little to make the title and name stand out a bit better. The brightness suggests a children's book. If that's what this is, disregard.
 

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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #9 on: November 25, 2017, 05:28:47 AM »
The image is good.  I would look into the following:

~ either change the title font color, or outline the title with a dark color to contrast it from the light-colored background

~ if possible, move the image up a bit so that the author name doesn't cover the dragon's nose and pot of gold.  If that's not possible, I'd move the author name up to 'sit' on the dragon's back.  I'd also make author name a tad bit smaller and change font, but that's just my personal taste.



BTW, as long as your official description/blurb makes sense, don't worry too much about how you described the book here.
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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #10 on: November 25, 2017, 08:23:26 AM »
I really like it. The two suggestions I would offer are: 1) get rid of that yellow outline around your author name, and 2) move your author name up to sit under the title so it doesn't block the dragon's nose and the gold.

Agreed. And the sword placement isn't too problematic, I did get the impression it was just leaning next to the kid but if people want to hurr hurr over it then that won't hurt a book with a light tone.

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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #11 on: November 25, 2017, 10:03:21 AM »
It's a nice cover.  It is a Middlegrade book right?  Because that's what it looks like to me.

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« Reply #12 on: November 25, 2017, 10:54:04 AM »
Who did the art?

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« Reply #13 on: November 25, 2017, 11:26:23 AM »
I really like it. The two suggestions I would offer are: 1) get rid of that yellow outline around your author name, and 2) move your author name up to sit under the title so it doesn't block the dragon's nose and the gold.

Seconded about author name placement. You've got too much space at the top, and the text at the bottom is covering parts of the image that it shouldn't. Stick the author name under the title and I think that's fixed.

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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #14 on: November 25, 2017, 11:42:29 AM »
Another vote for Shayne's suggestion. The stroke and the beveling take away from the artistic quality of the illustration. Also, you've got plenty of negative space in the top, so putting the author name up would be a win-win to fill that up. 
 

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« Reply #15 on: November 25, 2017, 05:30:11 PM »
I still prefer the notion of moving the image up a bit.  A little bit of the sky could easily be sacrificed so that the dragon's head can be more easily visible above the author name (which can be made smaller as well).  I like title and author name to not be right above/below each other.   8)
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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #16 on: November 25, 2017, 05:51:02 PM »
The detail on the dragon is beautiful.

I want to echo Melody Simmons. Is this Middlegrade? What is the market you are aiming for?

The reason I ask is because there's no edge? Even on the sword which I think should look a little worn or at least more detailed.

While the cover is pretty it shows no conflict and that's the problem I see. Perhaps one solution is to introduce an edge/conflict in the titles through your choice of font and some effects? Just a thought.

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« Reply #17 on: November 25, 2017, 06:49:47 PM »
I love it! Ah, that dragon is awesome! (love dragons here)

Yes, agreed about moving the author font down some so the dragon's face is unobstructed. Besides that, I think it looks awesome! Love love looooove it.

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Re: I would love your feedback on my cover!
« Reply #18 on: November 26, 2017, 08:50:41 AM »
I think that's a terrific cover image. 👍 Looks great.
But I agree with moving the author name text and imo the author name text shouldn't be more elaborate, embellished than the title text.
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« Reply #19 on: November 26, 2017, 11:54:57 AM »
I like the cover a lot.
I agree that the sword should be re-positioned.
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« Reply #20 on: November 26, 2017, 11:59:01 AM »
Lovely cover, can't do much wrong there. But yes, re-position the sword.

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« Reply #21 on: November 26, 2017, 10:37:43 PM »
Yes, do move the sword.  ;D The pic clearly let's us know at glance that  it YA. The blurby bit is funny, but you might want to split the sentence up into smaller sentences to be more clear for your readership. I agree about moving your name away from the dragon's snout. Good luck with your book!

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« Reply #22 on: November 28, 2017, 07:58:58 AM »
It's beautiful. I agree mildly about the sword. I like the idea of moving up your name. I think the cover definitely looks YA and I would try darkening it a bit, so it looks a little less cheery?

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« Reply #23 on: November 28, 2017, 08:03:50 AM »
I didn't notice anything weird about the sword until other people started snickering about it. But lots of people's minds go to places mine doesn't. But for Middle Grade? I doubt that's something most middle grade readers would immediately notice/think of. I mean, who's your market here?

I think it's a lovely piece of art, but someone else had a good point that there's not a lot of action going on or even implied here, which might be a problem if you're going for the MG fantasy adventure audience.

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« Reply #24 on: November 29, 2017, 01:34:42 AM »
Thank you all for your feedback, I wanted to let everyone know how much I appreciate it, a number of you regulars have helped me with your insights before and I absolutely love the kboard community for taking such an interest in helping us newer authors spread our wings and fly!

A point I should have made awhile ago, perhaps, is that this story is aimed as epic/coming of age fantasy, but it definitely has lighthearted elements,  Terry Pratchett and David Eddings were both inspirational to my original muse. The protagonists are younger dragons just spreading their wings, and it has at least a bit of the more idealistic heroes journey vibe, but my hope is that the story will appeal to lovers of fantasy in general.

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