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Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« on: January 03, 2018, 01:27:04 PM »
Hey I just paid many moneys for this cover for my new epic urban fantasy whqt do you thin





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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #1 on: January 03, 2018, 01:31:07 PM »
That font is very difficult to read. It's too stretched vertically, and the cover looks too charged with text.  Particularly the subtitle is almost impossible to read with that font/color mix.

Or at least that's what I think.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #2 on: January 03, 2018, 01:33:16 PM »
That font is very difficult to read. It's too stretched vertically, and the cover looks too charged with text.  Particularly the subtitle is almost impossible to read with that font/color mix.

Or at least that's what I think.

ok fair fair but did you even check the toenail version

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #3 on: January 03, 2018, 01:33:47 PM »
It needs more fire hands and less clothes on the woman. Half-dressed women go on urban fantasy; man chests go on romance.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #4 on: January 03, 2018, 01:34:46 PM »
ok fair fair but did you even check the toenail version

I'm well known for never reading the fine print. If they expected me to read it they wouldn't make it so fine, after all.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #5 on: January 03, 2018, 01:36:49 PM »
Fire your cover artist.  That does NOT look like a trap at all.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #6 on: January 03, 2018, 01:41:52 PM »
Fire your cover artist.  That does NOT look like a trap at all.

Depends on your definition of trap. There's a certain definition of the word where the model could be a very good trap indeed.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #7 on: January 03, 2018, 01:46:46 PM »
Not enough blue glow.  It's gotta really emphasize that title.  Plus the man chest needs more focus.  Maybe a little blue glow around that too?  Or perhaps your protagonist should be hugging the image - or shooting blue balls at it, if Chesty is supposed to be the antagonist.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #8 on: January 03, 2018, 01:53:05 PM »
I don't like the font. Have you thought of using comic sans? And maybe with blue glow around the title. And the author name. Just everything blue.


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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #9 on: January 03, 2018, 01:54:19 PM »
You should probably use more than one font. Like, a different font for each line of text.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #10 on: January 03, 2018, 01:55:54 PM »
The bare man chest should be bigger, and maybe have some Photoshopped-on tattoos. Oh, and definitely the man-chest needs to glow blue too.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #11 on: January 03, 2018, 01:56:37 PM »
She looks far, far, FAR too happy. She needs to look more p*ssed off.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #12 on: January 03, 2018, 02:00:39 PM »
Blue glows have been done to death, they're so last year. What you want is a PINK GLOW. It's the new thing. Trust me.  :P

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #13 on: January 03, 2018, 02:58:49 PM »
ur all amazin, srsly ur all are.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #14 on: January 03, 2018, 03:05:11 PM »
Blue glows have been done to death, they're so last year. What you want is a PINK GLOW. It's the new thing. Trust me.  :P

Oooo! Combine the pink and blue glow and make it purple to really draw the eye.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #16 on: January 03, 2018, 03:32:36 PM »
Depends on your definition of trap. There's a certain definition of the word where the model could be a very good trap indeed.

Did you just ruin the plot twist?

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #17 on: January 03, 2018, 03:39:00 PM »
The random tiny man chest killed me. I'm dead now.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #18 on: January 03, 2018, 03:52:25 PM »
She looked lonely, so I gave her a friend.   :-X


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« Reply #19 on: January 03, 2018, 03:55:15 PM »
So the car is named Bandit? I found the villain of the story!

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #20 on: January 03, 2018, 04:02:18 PM »
On second thought, maybe the man-chest is the way to go.  Lots of man-chests.  And the pink glow, too.


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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #21 on: January 03, 2018, 05:15:04 PM »
Needs more cow bell.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #22 on: January 03, 2018, 05:22:25 PM »
wenn kan bye buk 2 un pree odor???1!!

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« Reply #23 on: January 03, 2018, 05:38:02 PM »
She looked lonely, so I gave her a friend.

And he's telling his friend on the CB, "Witch better have my money!"

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #24 on: January 03, 2018, 05:42:11 PM »
The witch was feeling sorry for herself because she had no shoes, but then she met a man who had no feet.  Or legs.  Or groin.  Or head.