Author Topic: Critique my cover (it's a trap) (Read 1162 times) Tweet

Benjamin Douglas · « **on:** January 03, 2018, 01:27:04 PM »

Hey I just paid many moneys for this cover for my new epic urban fantasy whqt do you thin

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(disclaimer: fake on purpose. What's the point if we can't all laugh a little at ourselves?)

Tizzy · « **Reply #1 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:31:07 PM »

That font is very difficult to read. It's too stretched vertically, and the cover looks too charged with text. Particularly the subtitle is almost impossible to read with that font/color mix.

Or at least that's what I think.

Benjamin Douglas · « **Reply #2 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:33:16 PM »

Quote from: Tizzy on January 03, 2018, 01:31:07 PM

That font is very difficult to read. It's too stretched vertically, and the cover looks too charged with text. Particularly the subtitle is almost impossible to read with that font/color mix.

Or at least that's what I think.

ok fair fair but did you even check the toenail version

Paranormal Kitty · « **Reply #3 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:33:47 PM »

It needs more fire hands and less clothes on the woman. Half-dressed women go on urban fantasy; man chests go on romance.

Tizzy · « **Reply #4 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:34:46 PM »

Quote from: Benjamin Douglas on January 03, 2018, 01:33:16 PM

ok fair fair but did you even check the toenail version

I'm well known for never reading the fine print. If they expected me to read it they wouldn't make it so fine, after all.

♨ · « **Reply #5 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:36:49 PM »

Fire your cover artist. That does NOT look like a trap at all.

Tizzy · « **Reply #6 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:41:52 PM »

Quote from: Dan C. Rinnert on January 03, 2018, 01:36:49 PM

Fire your cover artist. That does NOT look like a trap at all.

Depends on your definition of trap. There's a certain definition of the word where the model could be a very good trap indeed.

D A Bale · « **Reply #7 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:46:46 PM »

Not enough blue glow. It's gotta really emphasize that title. Plus the man chest needs more focus. Maybe a little blue glow around that too? Or perhaps your protagonist should be hugging the image - or shooting blue balls at it, if Chesty is supposed to be the antagonist.

andycat · « **Reply #8 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:51:19 PM »

i only count 3 text effects on there and imo you want to use at least 4. maybe try a drop shadow or something.

agree with more blue glow too. it doesn't look paranormal enough yet. blue glow will make it paranormaler.

dcswain · « **Reply #9 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:53:05 PM »

I don't like the font. Have you thought of using comic sans? And maybe with blue glow around the title. And the author name. Just everything blue.

melodybremen · « **Reply #10 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:54:19 PM »

You should probably use more than one font. Like, a different font for each line of text.

kdiem · « **Reply #11 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:55:54 PM »

The bare man chest should be bigger, and maybe have some Photoshopped-on tattoos. Oh, and definitely the man-chest needs to glow blue too.

The 13th Doctor · « **Reply #12 on:** January 03, 2018, 01:56:37 PM »

She looks far, far, FAR too happy. She needs to look more p*ssed off.

(Yes, I read the small print

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C. Rysalis · « **Reply #13 on:** January 03, 2018, 02:00:39 PM »

Blue glows have been done to death, they're so last year. What you want is a PINK GLOW. It's the new thing. Trust me.

Benjamin Douglas · « **Reply #14 on:** January 03, 2018, 02:58:49 PM »

ur all amazin, srsly ur all are.

since youve given me sooo many great comments and i have neither time nor talent to do them right, here's a link to the .psd on my googledrive. have at it, music lovers. i can haz wanna see some improvement!!!1!

https://drive.google.com/open?id=1S5mg8HNsUjrnHGe9odZnPijKPByNMmqU

D A Bale · « **Reply #15 on:** January 03, 2018, 03:05:11 PM »

Quote from: C. Rysalis on January 03, 2018, 02:00:39 PM

Blue glows have been done to death, they're so last year. What you want is a PINK GLOW. It's the new thing. Trust me.

Oooo! Combine the pink and blue glow and make it purple to really draw the eye.

AmpersandBookInteriors · « **Reply #16 on:** January 03, 2018, 03:13:48 PM »

Paranormal Kitty · « **Reply #17 on:** January 03, 2018, 03:32:36 PM »

Quote from: Tizzy on January 03, 2018, 01:41:52 PM

Depends on your definition of trap. There's a certain definition of the word where the model could be a very good trap indeed.

Did you just ruin the plot twist?

SophiaQuinn · « **Reply #18 on:** January 03, 2018, 03:39:00 PM »

The random tiny man chest killed me. I'm dead now.

Jeff Tanyard · « **Reply #19 on:** January 03, 2018, 03:52:25 PM »

She looked lonely, so I gave her a friend.

C. Rysalis · « **Reply #20 on:** January 03, 2018, 03:55:15 PM »

So the car is named Bandit? I found the villain of the story!

Jeff Tanyard · « **Reply #21 on:** January 03, 2018, 04:02:18 PM »

On second thought, maybe the man-chest is the way to go. Lots of man-chests. And the pink glow, too.

TromboneAl · « **Reply #22 on:** January 03, 2018, 05:15:04 PM »

Needs more cow bell.

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kw3000 · « **Reply #23 on:** January 03, 2018, 05:22:25 PM »

wenn kan bye buk 2 un pree odor???1!!

♨ · « **Reply #24 on:** January 03, 2018, 05:38:02 PM »

Quote from: Jeff Tanyard on January 03, 2018, 03:52:25 PM

She looked lonely, so I gave her a friend.

And he's telling his friend on the CB, "Witch better have my money!"