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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #25 on: January 03, 2018, 05:42:11 PM »
The witch was feeling sorry for herself because she had no shoes, but then she met a man who had no feet.  Or legs.  Or groin.  Or head.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #26 on: January 03, 2018, 06:46:53 PM »
Jeff's iterations are very fine. I would only point out that if the color changes, so too must the title!

I Glow Pink and Sort of Stink?
I Glow Purple, ... then what? Twist my nerple?

Not sure about either of those.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #27 on: January 03, 2018, 07:17:49 PM »
Book 1: I Glow Blue (and So Will You)
Book 2: I Glow Pink (and You Will Shrink)
Book 3: I Glow Indigo (and Out You Go)
Book 4: I Glow Purple (and Then You Die)

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #28 on: January 03, 2018, 07:23:57 PM »
Book 1: I Glow Blue (and So Will You)
Book 2: I Glow Pink (and You Will Shrink)
Book 3: I Glow Indigo (and Out You Go)
Book 4: I Glow Purple (and Then You Die)

'I Glow Burnt Sienna (and I'll See You in the Back of my Jetta)' kinda rolls off the tongue.

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« Reply #29 on: January 03, 2018, 07:26:19 PM »
'I Glow Burnt Sienna (and I'll See You in the Back of my Jetta)' kinda rolls off the tongue.

That can be the fourth book and I Glow Purple becomes book five.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #30 on: January 03, 2018, 07:34:03 PM »
That can be the fourth book and I Glow Purple becomes book five.

Well fine - push mine to the back burner.

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« Reply #31 on: January 03, 2018, 07:39:16 PM »
Well fine - push mine to the back burner.

It's the Grand Finale!


I wonder if Benjamin is writing these himself or if this will be one of his co-authoring projects?

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #32 on: January 03, 2018, 07:46:56 PM »
It's the Grand Finale!

And end on an odd number?  That's unsanitary.

Oh wait...wrong thread.

Orrrrrrr we could have another book before purple called I Glow Green (When You Are Mean).

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #33 on: January 03, 2018, 07:56:26 PM »
Yikes, her hands are missing.  Are they on the man-chest?  Or somewhere else on the man's body that isn't pictured?  (Remote hands would be very, um, handy for a Itchty Witch.)

Or should that be Itchty Witcht??
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« Reply #34 on: January 03, 2018, 08:11:38 PM »
Orrrrrrr we could have another book before purple called I Glow Green (When You Are Mean).

But then after purple could be I Glow Red (So Glad You're Dead).

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #35 on: January 03, 2018, 09:33:27 PM »
Change nothing.

Step 1. Hit publish.

Step 2...





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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #36 on: January 03, 2018, 09:43:37 PM »
On second thought, maybe the man-chest is the way to go.  Lots of man-chests.  And the pink glow, too.




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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #37 on: January 03, 2018, 09:58:00 PM »
What I want to know is when my mom started moonlighting as a ten-dollar cover model.
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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #38 on: January 03, 2018, 10:05:01 PM »

What I want to know is when my mom started moonlighting as a ten-dollar cover model.

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Someone better put black bars over the images before Betsy brings down the ban hammer!

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #39 on: January 03, 2018, 10:15:15 PM »
It's not blue enough and the man chest needs blue glowing ... um.. you know ;)
The text needs to be more blue. Right now it's washed out.
The title I Glow Blue should really glow blue.
Also, she should be shooting lightning sparks out at the man chest if he's the enemy, or just have lightning in general because that goes with blue glow.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #40 on: January 03, 2018, 10:35:28 PM »
Well fine - push mine to the back burner.


Post up some covers and we'll move you to the front.   :-*


Also, she should be shooting lightning sparks out at the man chest if he's the enemy, or just have lightning in general because that goes with blue glow.


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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #41 on: January 04, 2018, 04:56:46 AM »
When can I buy this? Is preorder up?

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #42 on: January 04, 2018, 05:30:00 AM »
Change nothing.

Step 1. Hit publish.

Step 2...




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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #43 on: January 04, 2018, 06:41:43 AM »
I need an adult.

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Re: Critique my cover (it's a trap)
« Reply #44 on: January 04, 2018, 06:59:58 AM »
The random tiny man chest killed me. I'm dead now.

Same.