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Revamping my Book Description: Feedback Very Welcome!
« on: March 02, 2018, 01:01:08 PM »
Hi friends. I had it kindly pointed out to me recently that my book description needs some work. After reviewing several comments I see that this was putting it mildly. haha. I rewrote it, (with the help of some of you lovely Kboarders, and the new book description is below.
If you have time, please let me know what you think of it. Is this a book you would read? Does it catch your interest? Are there any places where you feel revisions are still necessary? I would love to get some opinions before I update amazon.

Thank you so much!!

New Book description:
"You better watch your back, because we're watching you."

Three high school juniors live benignly normal lives. Different as night and day, they would never normally associate. But they do have one thing in common: they are all acquainted with a murderer. Kickass Amy, nerdy Charles, and hot jock Zack must find a way to work together or die. After Amy crosses the supernatural leader of an infamous gang, she becomes his number one target. The gang's vindictive leader, Alex Cardelle, wants nothing more than to destroy the seemingly indestructible human girl. Amy has taken on the most ruthless supernatural creature the world has ever known, and the person she loves most will pay the price.

Meanwhile, an ominous entity known as the Blood Moon is quickly gaining power. Bound by blood and a debt he can never repay, Alex must provide the Blood Moon with a worthy sacrifice. He chooses three hated classmates as victims. If he must do his master's bidding, why not take out those he dislikes most along the way? Must Amy watch those she loves die because of one mistake?