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Writers' Cafe / Re: Blurb feedback needed for my legal thriller . . .
« on: January 17, 2017, 12:18:19 AM »
I too would dump the laundry list completely.  Thinking about it practically, if I'm not inclined to read the book before I get to "big oil" or "corruption," those things are not going to sway me.  If I was thinking about reading it, the list might make a reader pass if those particular call-outs don't grab them.  And if you are going to keep the list, get rid of "captivating characters."  Complimenting yourself seems really desperate to me (and I get no sense that you should be).  Your readers will be the judge of whether the characters are captivating.

Otherwise, I'm generally OK with the revised blurb, but it does not read courtroom drama to me.  In fact, I'm trying to figure out how there can be courtroom drama if he leaves his family behind and is on the run from the law and the killer (unless his lawyer is in the courtroom without him, which doesn't strike me as compelling, but I could be wrong).  Also, if a big oil conspiracy is at the heart of the story, maybe it should be hinted in the blurb somewhere.  I probably don't understand the story enough.

Not trying to be negative - just trying to help you put your best foot forward.

Writers' Cafe / Re: e-book formatting - do it myself or hire out?
« on: January 16, 2017, 11:46:12 PM »
Is D2D really the cheap method if they are charging you 10% of sales?  I suppose if you sell less than $300 worth of books, they are cheaper than hiring someone out for $30.  But the whole point of doing this is to sell more books.  Maybe I'm missing something.

Writers' Cafe / Re: Critique my Space Team Blurb - please help!
« on: August 30, 2016, 11:23:46 PM »
Sounds like a great story.  I think the new blurb is an improvement, but still not quite hitting the mark.  I agree with other comments that it's not quite pithy enough, and I frankly don't get enough of the comedy aspect of it that the cover shows.  Read some Pratchett or Douglas Adams blurbs and see if you can get the same tone. 

Writers' Cafe / Re: Slow Writer's Progress Thread
« on: June 14, 2016, 12:20:42 AM »
This thread was designed for me!  I've been working on my first book (a novella, the first in a series of five) for about 5 years.  I've been editing it since September.  I'm a slow writer, and I sometimes take months between working on it.  Sometimes I get distracted by other things (book 2 is about 50% written and book 3 is in process, along with the first page of about 10 other stories), sometimes work is just too busy to focus on anything else, but mostly it is just lack of dedication. Maybe this thread can inspire all of us to get off our asses and get our writing done!

Writers' Cafe / Re: Am I being greedy with my pricing?
« on: October 15, 2015, 02:23:14 PM »
Cool...interested in hearing how it goes

Writers' Cafe / Re: Mystery blurb help...please
« on: October 15, 2015, 11:58:02 AM »
Is the body found right away? If so, I wouldn't lead off setting it up as a missing persons case. Cutter is investigating the murder of a girl found in the back bays of New Jersey.

The rest of the blurb seems like a collection of unrelated thoughts - I don't see how they tie together. Is the girlfriend's case related? Who takes Cutter on a wild ride? How dues a gambling addict fit in and why is it important for the audience to know about them upfront? Same with the punk.  Telling me that there is a big plot does not do much, because a big plot to you might be small to me. Can you give any hints about who is involved without giving too much away?  Finally, I don't think Atlantic City has much of a reputation to be ruined these days.

Writers' Cafe / Re: Am I being greedy with my pricing?
« on: October 15, 2015, 11:21:44 AM »
To echo others, I'll admit that as a reader, I might be put off a bit by the increase in pricing as the series progresses, and knowing that I am going to have to pay a premium to find out how the series ends would make me less likely to start in the first pace. On the other hand, new releases are often priced at a premium, and readers are used to that. Maybe instead of a progressive price scheme, you have all the books in the series at a certain price ($4.99 say), except when a book first comes out, you charge a bit more.

I also agree with others that greed has nothing to do with it. Does the market support you charging more for the book? If so, do it. If not, don't.

Writers' Cafe / Re: Question on Sending ARC to Reviewers
« on: October 15, 2015, 09:36:35 AM »
Great, thanks all!

Writers' Cafe / Re: Share Your Best Tip For Self-Publishers...
« on: October 15, 2015, 01:33:40 AM »
that's my best tip beyond, "write a book people want to read," which is hard to evaluate beforehand.

If it was a matter of just doing that, we'd all be millionaires.

Writers' Cafe / Question on Sending ARC to Reviewers
« on: October 15, 2015, 12:54:10 AM »
This is probably a dumb question, but when soliciting reviews for a book with a free ARC, do you send the ARC with the inquiry, or only send it once they have agreed to review the book?  I can see the rationale for both, but I don't know what the reviewers expect.


Writers' Cafe / Re: A Weird Question. Possibly a dumb one.
« on: October 13, 2015, 08:20:12 PM »
I'm considering something similar for my upcoming series, publishing the first three books separately, and then books 4-5 together, for story reasons (it's meta and will make sense in the context of the books)...this has been a very interesting discussion!

Writers' Cafe / Re: Book Cover Designers on Fiverr?
« on: October 06, 2015, 03:16:57 AM »
Seems the takeaway is that there are some good designers on fiverr, but you're not going to get a good cover spending only five dollars - you either need to pay for the source image and send it to them, or pay for the editable file and tweak it yourself. 

Andrea, I really like the Gypsy Curse cover - really cool. The others are good too.

Lynda, yes, please PM me.  I'm not writing romance, so not sure how your guy will do with my stuff, but willing to check him out.

Writers' Cafe / Re: Question for Christian writers
« on: October 04, 2015, 08:56:33 PM »
If you're concerned, turn the champagne in Martinelli's sparkling cider and you're good to go! :)

You can file the copyright at any time.  The only real issue with the timing is the level of protection you get against infringers if you register before or after the infringement takes place.

Writers' Cafe / Re: Book Cover Designers on Fiverr?
« on: October 04, 2015, 08:49:18 PM »
Andrea, did you buy images on istockphoto or the like and send them to the artist? 

Celadon, are you saying that some artists will sell you a design without the rights to actually use it on book you are selling?  I agree, that seems like a total bait and switch.

Writers' Cafe / Book Cover Designers on Fiverr?
« on: October 04, 2015, 03:21:43 PM »
Has anyone used one and how were the results?  Some have great reviews, but not really sure what to expect.

Writers' Cafe / Re: Have You Posted to Your Blog Recently?
« on: October 04, 2015, 02:52:17 PM »
Had to post about my Angels losing.  So sad.

Writers' Cafe / Re: Anthology cover comments
« on: October 04, 2015, 01:21:59 AM »
I agree with my colleague.  Just the title and your name on the cover will do, especially since the cover art is simply breathtaking.

I disagree only if any of the stories is actually noteworthy or, by itself, might give someone a reason to buy.  Otherwise, yeah, I think you can remove them.

Regardless of the blurb, I love the premise. Definitely a book I'd check out.

Cool, thanks!

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This is a tough one! I don't have a lot of time today, but maybe something along the lines of ...

Can the present alter the past? Can delusion shape reality? Marcus Peterson, resident of the Brookhollow Home for Mental Health isn't sure. His doctor has prescribed him an usual therapy, write stories about his fellow asylum mates. Drawn to Henry Graves, a mysterious inmate who claims to be a time traveler, Marcus finds himself wound into the very story he's telling. Graves' outlandish tales of traveling back in time are just the first in a series of remarkable stories that just might become true in the telling.

I have no idea if that's accurate, but it's a take on it. Meta is haaaard.

Damn lady, that's pretty good!  Thanks!

I would appreciate any other thoughts.

What's the actual plot of your book? Is Henry or Marcus your MC? What is your MC trying to do? What's trying to stop him? What happens if he fails?

Marcus is the MC of the series and narrator of the book.  Henry is the MC of Marcus' story in this book.  It's meta-fictionish.  Really fictional meta-nonfiction (in the universe of the book, Marcus is telling a true story).  Marcus is trying to learn (and tell) Henry's story while surviving the issues raised in asylum life (other inmates, interesting "treatment" tactics).  Henry's story is about him building and using the time machine.  If Marcus fails, the story ends.  We know from the beginning that Henry succeeded in doing something (assuming he's not imagining it all), but don't really know what that was until the end.

Course maybe I should take it to heart!

Writers' Cafe / Re: Promo next week so seeking blurb help for thriller
« on: October 02, 2015, 02:26:09 PM »
It's not bad, but a couple things that jumped out at me.  The second sentence has a ton of nouns: Army Ranger, CIA paramilitary operative, granddaughter, friend, human trafficking network, drug cartel.  There's a lot to unpack there. Maybe break those ideas up into two sentences?  Also, "engages in war" sounds bland. "Wages war" may be cliche, but it's a but more action packed. 

Maybe instead of inflicting his brand of vigilante justice, he is using his skills to save the girl? Unless she's dead, and then the vigilante justice part would make more sense.

Writers' Cafe / Re: Last day at my day job
« on: October 02, 2015, 01:38:59 PM »
Very awesome and inspiring! To your continued successes!

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