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Which title should I use?
« on: July 22, 2020, 05:16:11 pm »
My quasi-military thriller was initially titled Navy SEAL Everglades Rescue. My protagonists are two disgraced SEALs obsessed about getting their trident pins back. But in this book they do not get them back. So they are actually former Navy SEALs, but Ex-Navy SEAL Everglades Rescue hardly works as a title. I could go with Everglades Rescue but then I would lose the Navy SEAL connection via the title.

Pros I see of going with Everglades Rescue as the title would be my protagonists would have more leeway in terms of how they act. Plus diehard SEAL readers will hopefully go easier on me in reviews.

Cons: I lose the SEAL readership. The book becomes just another thriller.

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    Re: Which title should I use?
    « Reply #1 on: July 22, 2020, 07:51:35 pm »
    How about splitting it, using Everglades Rescue as the main title, but also using the term 'SEALs' somehow in a subtitle?

    Books with subtitles can also catch the eye.

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    Re: Which title should I use?
    « Reply #2 on: July 23, 2020, 05:24:11 am »
    A tricky conundrum. Could you crowbar the word "Disavowed" in, perhaps?

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    Re: Which title should I use?
    « Reply #3 on: July 23, 2020, 06:37:03 am »
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    ---Main title
    Everglades Rescue

    ---sub-title/tag lines
    A Navy Seals Thriller
    Reclaim the Trident
    Navy Seals Heroes Again

    or something about fallen heroes redeeming themselves.

    Could be "Reclaiming the Trident -- A Navy Seals Everglade Thriller"

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    Re: Which title should I use?
    « Reply #4 on: July 23, 2020, 06:56:36 am »
    My thinking may not be technically correct, but the fact that these characters were full-fledged SEALs should stand for something.  The whole point of the book is for them to reclaim their "honorable" status, so why can't the word be used?  Former governors and presidents are still referred to by their titles.  Same with military members, generals, admirals, etc.  I'm not up on all the legal groundrules and technicalities, but I think using the word SEALs in the title would be OK.

    ETA:  I know people say there is "no such thing as a 'former' Marine," so why not the same for a SEAL?  Even if now disgraced, they did earn their tridents and serve the country.  I watch a lot of JAG and other military-type shows, but I also know IANAL.   :P
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    Re: Which title should I use?
    « Reply #5 on: July 23, 2020, 10:18:38 am »
    How about splitting it, using Everglades Rescue as the main title, but also using the term 'SEALs' somehow in a subtitle?

    Books with subtitles can also catch the eye.

    Thanks jb. But if I use a series name with "Navy SEAL" in it, I'll still be vulnerable to readers saying it wasn't about Navy SEALs.

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    Re: Which title should I use?
    « Reply #6 on: July 23, 2020, 10:21:38 am »
    A tricky conundrum. Could you crowbar the word "Disavowed" in, perhaps?

    Thanks, Francis, but Disavowed seems like it would really stand out in a title (in a distracting way).

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    Re: Which title should I use?
    « Reply #7 on: July 23, 2020, 10:23:03 am »
    .

    ---Main title
    Everglades Rescue

    ---sub-title/tag lines
    A Navy Seals Thriller
    Reclaim the Trident
    Navy Seals Heroes Again

    or something about fallen heroes redeeming themselves.

    Could be "Reclaiming the Trident -- A Navy Seals Everglade Thriller"

    .

    Thanks jvin. Good suggestions but here's the thing: they don't reclaim the trident. Things go south and they're on the verge of going rogue.

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    Re: Which title should I use?
    « Reply #8 on: July 23, 2020, 10:37:53 am »
    My thinking may not be technically correct, but the fact that these characters were full-fledged SEALs should stand for something.  The whole point of the book is for them to reclaim their "honorable" status, so why can't the word be used?  Former governors and presidents are still referred to by their titles.  Same with military members, generals, admirals, etc.  I'm not up on all the legal groundrules and technicalities, but I think using the word SEALs in the title would be OK.

    ETA:  I know people say there is "no such thing as a 'former' Marine," so why not the same for a SEAL?  Even if now disgraced, they did earn their tridents and serve the country.  I watch a lot of JAG and other military-type shows, but I also know IANAL.   :P

    Geez, Jena, you've really been coming through for me. Thank you! What you say makes sense.

    My first book about Navy SEALs (which was clearly a farce) was so over-the-top silly I got thrashed in the reviews (for disrespect and a lack of research). This book is not silly at all. I'm starting to think it's going to be okay with this cover (and the title):



    What do you think of the series name?

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