It's a suspense novel titled Saving Baby. Thanks!
The biggest challenge facing seventeen-year-old high school student Annie Rebarchek is getting a summer job. It's a long shot but she interviews for a nanny position with billionaire Houston Monroe and is shocked when she gets the job--and even more shocked by what she finds.
Monroe's baby is terribly ill. It's yellow-ish, crying constantly. Monroe insists it's healthy but refuses to hold it and won't let Annie hold it either. He asserts he's only practicing a form of 'self-soothing' child-rearing, but Annie thinks something more sinister might be happening. Just as she discovers there is she's fired.
Up against Monroe's overwhelming money, power and influence can Annie summon the courage to heed the baby's cry?
I think it's pretty good, but there's a few weak spots:
"...and is shocked when she gets the job--and even more shocked by what she finds. "
'What she finds' is too vague, and should be more specific, such as something like 'what she discoverers in the Munroe household," or "what she discovers when she shows up for work."
Also, 'shocked' is used twice. You could switch it up with a synonym.
"Just as she discovers there is she's fired."
Sounds awkward to me. I think it depends too much on the previous sentence. Or maybe it needs a comma after 'is'. You could be more descriptive with something like, "Just as she discovers a startling secret, she's fired."
And I agree with Marcus about revealing a little more to raise the stakes in the readers minds. Is this a novel about an investigation by Child Protective Services, or is it more 'gothic'?
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