I got a little lost inside some of the sentences and had to back up and re-read them (something a person browsing through many books probably won't do). My impression when I finished was that it could be an interesting story, but not one I had an urge to buy right now. I'm a terrible blurb writer, so I don't know how to fix it. I know I've been of no help whatsoever. Some of the people on here are very talented though. Real help is coming soon.