I think it is pretty good as it stands, but the following sentence ...
Something is upsetting the silent, snowy peace of Kilometre Zero ...
would make a much stronger opening.
I would use it a single line (including the ellipsis) above the existing 1st paragraph. It is impactful and should draw readers in. You will, of course need to write a new sentence for the second paragraph if you were to go with it.
Something is upsetting the silent, snowy peace of Kilometre Zero ...
would make a much stronger opening.
I would use it a single line (including the ellipsis) above the existing 1st paragraph. It is impactful and should draw readers in. You will, of course need to write a new sentence for the second paragraph if you were to go with it.