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Trying to write a blurb for a sequel and finding it really difficult to write something gripping enough to entice a reader without giving away TOO much of the plot of the first book. I think this may be a lost cause. Which of the two blurbs do you prefer, and do you have any other feedback? Much appreciated! :)

The first one is slightly more spoilerly than the second - the bargain it mentions is a major plot point in the first book.

Nobody loves a traitor, and Gia is far from innocent. She's a spy, undercover in Special Branch, the police who investigate the illegal use of magic. Her days are spent mucking out the cages of tracker-werewolves or helping to conduct experiments on magical creatures. She keeps her eyes and ears open, learning what she can, all the while sending secret messages to the outside world. If her treachery is discovered she risks torture and death, but this was the bargain she made to keep her little brother, Nico, safe.

Then Gia gets shocking news. Nico has disappeared, right out of his bed in the middle of the night. It seems unlikely that even Special Branch could be responsible. So who took Nico? Could it be the magical terrorists, the Belle Gente? Or is there another, even stranger explanation?

"Wolf Logic" is the sequel to "Crooks and Straights". It's a contemporary fantasy set in Cape Town, South Africa.


Never trust a werewolf. That's Gia's first lesson before going into the Wolf Cages. She's a cadet now, in Special Branch, the police who investigate the illegal use of magic. Working with werewolves is only one of her duties, and some of her work is even more dangerous: Gia is a spy.

It's a dangerous secret. Discovery would mean torture and death, and her safety depends on staying out of trouble. But then Gia gets shocking news from home. Her little brother, Nico, has disappeared: taken right out of his bed, in the middle of the night. She's the only one who might have a chance of figuring out what's become of him. It seems unlikely that even Special Branch could be responsible. So who took Nico? Could it be the magical terrorists, the Belle Gente? Or is there another, even stranger explanation?

"Wolf Logic" is the sequel to "Crooks and Straights". It's a contemporary fantasy set in Cape Town, South Africa.
 

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The second one is much better IMHO. The first one is too bitty. Instead of "She's the only one" you need to put "Gia's the only one" and I'd probably remove a few extraneous commas, but apart from that I'd say it was pretty good.
 
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