[dalya]

I feel like #1 would have the most broad appeal to the folks putting sexy bad boys on the top 100. It's not really the one to my personal taste, but the bestseller list doesn't reflect my personal taste. That being said, I actually liked #1 and it did hold my interest.

Your potential buyer will have the blurb and the cover, and will also take a glance at the reviews if they want more details. This is a very good blurb, and I wouldn't want to see more detail bogging it down.

I would tweak the final paragraph, though, because by the time I'm reading it, I've forgotten what the topic is. Try to rework "She knows it would be smart to let it go" without the nasty little 'it' word, so you keep the reader on the point. Throw in a sexy word or phrase, like sexual chemistry or flickering passion or simmering lust.

 

[dalya]

Dalya's right about the bad boy thing, btw, but just remember to talk about him from her POV; the second version sounds like he's the POV character is where I was inarticulately going...

I see what you mean. I just see so many heavy-breathing books where they start off talking about the hunky man-yummies, and we feel that lascivious female gaze.

I think a male-pov story wouldn't start with a physical description of the guy, but with how freaking awesome/misunderstood he is, heehee. ;-)