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The third blurb is the most interesting. Maybe you can tweak it to show more about her, since it's in her POV. I like the way you described the story and stakes in this one.
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This is great! I think you did a really good job of incorporating everything, and the marshmallow vodka line made me smile. This blurb would definitely make me download a sample to read more. Good luck! 
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