[Paul Kohler]

Hey everyone, and thanks in advance for the help here!

I am going to be publishing the fourth and final part of my Linear Shift serial next week, and I am looking for a bit of help for the blurb. Anyone care to chime in?

Here is what I have:

In this action packed conclusion, Peter and Julie travel to France to complete their mission. They quickly realize that anything that relates to time travel is less than predictable, as they are met with one tragic hurdle after the next.

Through the journey, Peter finds himself, finds love lost and love gained, and is tempted to remain in 1942 at every turn. Will he stay in the past to create a new life for himself, or will he return to the future, and his loving family?

Seeing as this is the last part of a serial, I have to assume that the potential reader will not start reading at part 4. Therefore, I am not going to explain the first three parts out in this blurb.

Thanks!

 

[cinisajoy]

Action packed.

 

[cinisajoy]

And yuck on the questions and where did Julie go?

 

[Kirkee]

RE: questions, Paul. gotta go.

To answer your question: blurb writing (for so many of us) is a painful, at times seemingly
insurmountable task, because we are too close to the material & feel a need to get all the best
moments in there... What we (very often) end up doing is including way too much info, which is a
no-no. I believe in keeping it brief, keeping it short enough and exciting enough to grab the potential reader...and then letting it go.

I have such an arduous time with blurbs that, don't laugh (well, ok, laugh) that I rewrote/revised one of my blurbs
3 (or was it 4)hundred times...until I had the sucker whittled down to two brief sentences (down from 3/4 of a page.) Ridiculous? I know it. It's agony (for some), a cakewalk for others. And one of those who possesses a real knack for boiling down a blurb to its essence is the Big Kahuna of Blurbs himself, Lummox, Jr.

Usually, all one has to do is whisper his name, and the Doc appears, as if like magic. 

Best, K.

 

[Sever Bronny]

In this action packed conclusion, Peter and Julie travel to France to complete their mission. They quickly realize that anything that relates to time travel is less than predictable, as they are met with one tragic hurdle after the next.

Through the journey, Peter finds himself, finds love lost and love gained, and is tempted to remain in 1942 at every turn. Will he stay in the past to create a new life for himself, or will he return to the future, and his loving family?

Just practicing. Ignore as you please

In the finale to the X series, Peter and Julie travel to France to complete their mission (do your fans know which mission this refers to?). But they quickly realize time travel is mercilessly unpredictable, as [an example of why]. [Needs something here about Julie, something she needs to overcome]. As Peter struggles to find himself in [detail of chaos], he also faces a difficult choice--remain in the year 1942, or return to his loving family in the future.