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I'm still not happy with my product description, as I feel it doesn't put across the mood of the book. For example, while it does have a romantic thread running through it, other characters' journeys are quite important and it's not a straight romance. I had a great comment from a reader who GOT it; he said I was an 'ace at debunking the shallow' hehe. Swallow is satirical - 'Although satire is usually meant to be funny, its greater purpose is often constructive social criticism, using wit as a weapon.' I don't think my current blurb gets that across, or whether I even need to? I'm conscious of wanting it to be short enough to fit on the back of a 6"x9" paperback.
Also, I have two other characters who have prominent stories throughout the book - do they need mentioning? One is a fashion model who falls from grace and escapes justice, the other is a concert violinist with a barrel of secrets that come spilling out, linking her to my female protagonist.
Yes, I am rambling now.
Blurb:
The rules are simple in the entertainment industry: Play the game, get burned!
Luna Halliwell is on a path of self-destruction, until she meets infamous rock star Wolf Taylor in rehab, and falls hopelessly in love. Talented and hedonistic, Wolf’s at the clinic for one reason - to garner publicity for his new album – and he doesn’t see why he shouldn’t have a little fun while he’s taking one for the band. Love doesn’t figure in his long-term plans, so the last thing he banks on is developing feelings for her, too.
After a whirlwind romance, Luna discovers being half of a hot celebrity couple isn’t all it’s cracked up to be, and when a New York artist gives her the romantic attention she craves, she is faced with the ultimate decision. Stand by the man of a million girls' dreams or take a second shot at love?
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All advice greatly appreciated x

I'm still not happy with my product description, as I feel it doesn't put across the mood of the book. For example, while it does have a romantic thread running through it, other characters' journeys are quite important and it's not a straight romance. I had a great comment from a reader who GOT it; he said I was an 'ace at debunking the shallow' hehe. Swallow is satirical - 'Although satire is usually meant to be funny, its greater purpose is often constructive social criticism, using wit as a weapon.' I don't think my current blurb gets that across, or whether I even need to? I'm conscious of wanting it to be short enough to fit on the back of a 6"x9" paperback.
Also, I have two other characters who have prominent stories throughout the book - do they need mentioning? One is a fashion model who falls from grace and escapes justice, the other is a concert violinist with a barrel of secrets that come spilling out, linking her to my female protagonist.
Yes, I am rambling now.
Blurb:
The rules are simple in the entertainment industry: Play the game, get burned!
Luna Halliwell is on a path of self-destruction, until she meets infamous rock star Wolf Taylor in rehab, and falls hopelessly in love. Talented and hedonistic, Wolf’s at the clinic for one reason - to garner publicity for his new album – and he doesn’t see why he shouldn’t have a little fun while he’s taking one for the band. Love doesn’t figure in his long-term plans, so the last thing he banks on is developing feelings for her, too.
After a whirlwind romance, Luna discovers being half of a hot celebrity couple isn’t all it’s cracked up to be, and when a New York artist gives her the romantic attention she craves, she is faced with the ultimate decision. Stand by the man of a million girls' dreams or take a second shot at love?
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All advice greatly appreciated x