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Since I'm sending my novel, Wings of Twilight, off to professional editing this weekend (it's already been through a proofread & edit by my wife), I thought it would be a good time to work on a cover blurb. Unfortunately, I feel my skills at adequately summarizing my story without giving away any spoilers is sorely lacking.
I've written two versions so far:
Blurb 1
Calliome, a world broken by magic, reforged by heroes. Five heroes seek their destinies in the Twilight Dungeon, a scar of evil upon the world. Meanwhile, the Twilight Defenders repel invaders from their home. The two groups are destined to meet, and they will learn few things are as they seem.
Blurb 2
Since the healing of the world, the Twilight Dungeon has attracted treasure seekers and glory hounds to its depths. None have ever returned.
Lord Strom Lightbringer and his companions now seek the dungeon, convinced they can cleanse the world of the evil taint within. Only the Twilight Defenders stand in their way, themselves convinced they must repel the surface invaders from the only home they have.
Both sound weak and a little lame to me. I guess it's a good thing I don't have a full-time job in marketing.
I've written two versions so far:
Blurb 1
Calliome, a world broken by magic, reforged by heroes. Five heroes seek their destinies in the Twilight Dungeon, a scar of evil upon the world. Meanwhile, the Twilight Defenders repel invaders from their home. The two groups are destined to meet, and they will learn few things are as they seem.
Blurb 2
Since the healing of the world, the Twilight Dungeon has attracted treasure seekers and glory hounds to its depths. None have ever returned.
Lord Strom Lightbringer and his companions now seek the dungeon, convinced they can cleanse the world of the evil taint within. Only the Twilight Defenders stand in their way, themselves convinced they must repel the surface invaders from the only home they have.
Both sound weak and a little lame to me. I guess it's a good thing I don't have a full-time job in marketing.