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So, I'm about to launch the third book in my series! But the blurb is kicking my rear region. I would be hugely appreciative if anyone could give me comments / feedback / suggestions.
The genre is space opera / science fiction thriller. So I want to promise action, suspense, and planetary-scale conflict.
Here's what I got:
Bruised by tragedy, Space Corps agent Elfrida Goto accepts a quiet assignment on Mercury, the factory of the solar system. But she's soon swept up in an election campaign that could end human colonization on Mercury. Threatened by a glamorous but evil candidate, Elfrida turns for help to a reclusive local corporation ... that's hiding a terrible secret.
Now, far from help, Elfrida alone stands between the colonists of Mercury and a fate worse than death. But the greatest danger she faces may be her own past.
And on Mercury, the sun is rising.
The genre is space opera / science fiction thriller. So I want to promise action, suspense, and planetary-scale conflict.
Here's what I got:
Bruised by tragedy, Space Corps agent Elfrida Goto accepts a quiet assignment on Mercury, the factory of the solar system. But she's soon swept up in an election campaign that could end human colonization on Mercury. Threatened by a glamorous but evil candidate, Elfrida turns for help to a reclusive local corporation ... that's hiding a terrible secret.
Now, far from help, Elfrida alone stands between the colonists of Mercury and a fate worse than death. But the greatest danger she faces may be her own past.
And on Mercury, the sun is rising.