I like that it's pithy. I think I'm incapable of writing my own blurbs.
Some confusions that come for me:
"...election campaign that could end human colonization on Mercury." You mean like a vote to disband the colony, or a more dramatic consequence of the election?
"...and a fate worse than death" Fate for the colony or for Elfrida. The cliched "fate worse than death" is rape - I don't know if you want that association.
"...the greatest danger she faces may be her own past." So that suggests that the "fate worse than death is for the colony, not her.
"And on Mercury, the sun is rising." What does that imply?
What's her dilemma?
Some confusions that come for me:
"...election campaign that could end human colonization on Mercury." You mean like a vote to disband the colony, or a more dramatic consequence of the election?
"...and a fate worse than death" Fate for the colony or for Elfrida. The cliched "fate worse than death" is rape - I don't know if you want that association.
"...the greatest danger she faces may be her own past." So that suggests that the "fate worse than death is for the colony, not her.
"And on Mercury, the sun is rising." What does that imply?
What's her dilemma?