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We have a pretty different, pretty good book that just wont sell well, even when FREE! We're pretty certain the title is the problem and well... let's just get to the point. It's titled Capri's Fate, which really tells you nothing about the story. Capri? Women's pants? An island in the Mediterranean? A car? A boat? No it's a woman's name--short for Capricious and Fate isn't destiny. It's spirit of sorts who's half man and half--you guessed it--Fate, son of one of the three mythological sisters. I told you it was different. (BTW if you'd like to get it it's free everywhere thanks to a price match) Here's the reworked BLURB:

What's a woman to do when her fantasy is stronger than reality?

After corporate business woman, Capricious Gray visits a sex toy convention she gets more than she bargains for when the mysterious disembodied voice who helped her with her purchases follows her home. Passion ensues, leaving Capri torn between lust for her fantasy lover and the desperate need for reality in her life.

Thall, a son of the Fates, harbors the irrepressible need to be with the woman he's desired from afar for years. In order to make her his, he must help Capri get past her fears, including the fear of what he represents - a fantasy.

Can fantasy become a reality for these two lovers?


I think it's better if it stops after her life, but that's another matter. So now you have an idea of what Capri's Fate is about. Here's the cover which is IMO quite good:

The obvious thing in my mind is Tempting Fate, but that's too obvious. So how about. Anyone out there have a killer title?
 

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I assume you mean that it underperforms your other books. As to why, I don't think it's a terrible title, and sometimes it's really hard to pin down the real reasons, but maybe the problem is not "Capri", but "Fate". It sounds a little generic. Could you come up with something sexier that hints at sex, lust, desire, etc? Capri's Desires, maybe?
 

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Book titles are the bane of my life. I'm struggling with one for my latest wip right now!

Sorry, but I'm not sure I could take a heroine named Capricious very seriously. Perhaps others might feel the same way?
 

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Jen Black said:
Book titles are the bane of my life. I'm struggling with one for my latest wip right now!

Sorry, but I'm not sure I could take a heroine named Capricious very seriously. Perhaps others might feel the same way?
Maybe, but Capricious is only used once and then it's Capri
 

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MichaelWallace said:
I assume you mean that it underperforms your other books. As to why, I don't think it's a terrible title, and sometimes it's really hard to pin down the real reasons, but maybe the problem is not "Capri", but "Fate". It sounds a little generic. Could you come up with something sexier that hints at sex, lust, desire, etc? Capri's Desires, maybe?
I didn't say the title was terrible, just that it doesn't catch buyers attention. We need something catchy. Something with a little pzazz! Doesn't anyone have an idea?
 
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