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Here are some interior monologue tips from "Self-Editing for Fiction Writers" by Renni Browne & Dave King:

Never, ever use quotes with your interior monologue. It is not merely poor style; it is, by today's standards, ungrammatical. Thoughts are thoughts, not spoken.

[Using thinker attributions (ie 'he thought', 'she wondered')] should be the rare exception. Whenever you're writing from a single point of view - as you will be ninety percent of the time - you can simply jettison thinker attributions. Your readers know who's doing the thinking.

Unless you are deliberately writing with narrative distance, there is no reason to cast your interior monologue in the first person.

And whether or not you are writing with narrative distance, it's not a good idea to cast all of your interior monologue in italics.

But if italics, first person, or separate paragraphs are to be rarely used, what's the norm? How do you set off your interior monologue when you're writing with narrative intimacy? Quite simply, you don't. One of the signs that you are writing from an intimate point of view is that the line between your descriptions and your interior monologue begins to blur. Readers move effortlessly from seeing the world through your character's eyes to seeing the world through your character's mind and back again.
 

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MosesSiregarIII said:
This is really strange, because my version of this book (I think I have the first edition, published 1994) not only says different things, it actually contradicts some of this. For example, my edition cites good examples of using italics for interior monologue, doesn't make a point to say that interior monologue shouldn't be expressed in first person, and says that setting IM off in its own paragraph can be a good technique.

The only direct quote from above that matches my edition is the first three sentences you quoted. I wonder if you have a later edition and they changed their opinion to recommend this style more than the others.
That's odd. I copied that from a post I made back in November of last year (link). At that time I copied it from a version I had borrowed from the library.

This post reminded me I hadn't bought the book, so I did that yesterday, and it should arrive on Monday. I'll compare that version when it arrives. I'll also re-borrow it from the library, but with our library system, the books come in from different libraries around the county, so I probably won't get the same book I borrowed the first time.
 

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MosesSiregarIII said:
It looks like there are two editions. The first is from '94 and the second is from '04. The comments you posted are from the newer edition.
The book arrived today, and you're correct, it is the 2004 edition, which matches what I posted. I guess they changed their minds.

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