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Like many of you I often struggle with blurbs, some books more than others. My book Manhattan Miracle was one. :mad: I tried and tried but could never come up with something that grabbed me so I enlisted Fiverr for some help. :p Here are four blogs courtesy of two Fiverr entrepreneurs, preceded by my existing blurb and followed by a new blub from me going in an entirely new direction. I'd like your help in choosing which blurb, if any, you find the most interesting. ;D

Current Short Blurb
While celebrating a promotion, a chance encounter brings Brad and Ginger a gorgeous model/escort together for a night on the town. This leads to a bizarre supernatural incident, an occurrence in which their bodies switch, literally changing their lives forever.

Current Long Blurb

A chance encounter leads Wall Street banker, Brad Fairchild to take gorgeous model/escort Ginger Allen out on the town to help him celebrate a promotion. Spending the night in a Manhattan hotel suite, a spiritual anomaly transposes Brad and Ginger's bodies. Flabbergasted, the next morning, the pair experience a plethora of emotions from outrage to anger to confusion.
Dependent on each other after the bizarre supernatural occurrence, the pair resolve to make the best of their new situation. Though there are aspects of their transformed state they like, the challenges are enormous, starting with Brad's next day meeting to receive his big promotion. Can Ginger, who is Brad in body only, pull off a Brad impersonation for meeting? And can Brad, in Ginger's body get hired as Ginger's secretary so she can advise her who is who and what needs to be done. But when the big boss gets a look at Ginger, he wants her for himself.
As they meet and overcome each challenge the pair grow closer and closer, they realize their lives have changed forever. Can they ever change back into the person they were? And if they could, would they even want to?

Fiverr Blurbs
Blurb One:

Ever wondered what it would be like if you and your lover switched bodies? Brad and Ginger are about to find out. After a reckless night in a Manhattan hotel suite and a weird supernatural event, the two find themselves in each other's bodies. The only problem is Brad, or Ginger, has a promotion waiting at work the next morning!
Can Brad become his own secretary in time to fix an impossible problem before his boss finds out?
Blurb Two:
Can a man become his own secretary? The idea would have sounded silly to Brad Fairchild before he checked into a love suite the night before a big promotion. Now after a strange spiritual event, he is in his lover's body and she is in his. His girlfriend has a meeting with the big boss in twelve hours to accept his promotion.
And Brad isn't quite sure if he can pass the secretary interview. After all, his girlfriend is conducting it.
If he doesn't get hired, his boss might give him, or her, a second chance.
Blurb Three
So Brad and Ginger switched bodies because of an otherworldly power during a night of torrid Manhattan romance? So Brad has a big promotion meeting in 12 hours? Simple! He can just become his own secretary and walk his girlfriend through the next day's tough challenges.
That is until his boss decides he wants to hire him as his very own personal assistant.
Fiverr Blurb Four
After a night on the town together, Brad and Ginger wake up to find that their lives have drastically changed. Ginger is no longer the gorgeous model/escort that she used to be and Brad is far from the man he thought he was.
Their supernatural transformation will take them places they never dreamed could be possible, but exploring the seemingly impossible leads to an even stranger twist of events.
Existing in their newly acquired bodies will take more than a little know-how to get them through. As they delve further and further into the inner workings of their opposite gender roles, they each find themselves embroiled in even more bizarre circumstances and will have to conquer those in order to achieve their ultimate goals.
But, after getting a taste of life from the other side, is reverting back to their original bodies really what they want?

My latest BLURB
Match making angel, Madame Suriano and Carpenter, her feisty, freshly winged, sidekick get into some big mischief in this, her latest escapade. After transposing the bodies of Brad and Ginger (our hero and heroine) after a night of passionate lovemaking, the angels kick some serious ass and then go on to… Nuh-uh, you know I can't tell you what happens next. ::)
 

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My opinions in blue and scratched some words out. Only an opinion. The reason I scratched out the lines below, I felt they were obvious. Everyone knows a secretary's job. It's more powerful to leave the rest up to the reader's imagination. We all know secretaries must schedule, advise, etc. Good luck with it!! EDITED TO ADD: Normally I like the big question as the last sentence. But, leaving the big boss sentence as the last one, immediately puts questions into the reader's mind. I think it's a great last sentence.

A chance encounter leads Wall Street banker, Brad Fairchild to take gorgeous model/escort (pick one. Model or escort) Ginger Allen out on the town to help him celebrate a his promotion. Spending the night in a Manhattan hotel suite, a spiritual anomaly transposes Brad and Ginger's bodies. Flabbergasted, the next morning, The following morning, the pair experience a plethora of emotions from outrage to anger to confusion.

Now dependent on each other after the bizarre, supernatural occurrence, the pair resolve to make the best of their new situation. Though there are aspects of their transformed state they like, the challenges are enormous, starting beginning with Brad's next day meeting to receive his big promotion. Can Ginger, who is Brad in body only now Brad, pull off a Brad impersonation? for the meeting? And can Brad, in Ginger's body, get hired as Ginger's secretary? so she can advise her who is who and what needs to be done.

But when the big boss gets a look at Ginger, he wants her for himself.
As they meet and overcome each challenge the pair grow closer and closer, they realize their lives have changed forever. Can they ever change back into the person they were? And if they could, would they even want to?
 

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Here it is:  :D

A chance encounter leads Wall Street banker, Brad Fairchild to take gorgeous escort, Ginger Allen out on the town to help celebrate his promotion. Spending the night in a Manhattan hotel suite, a spiritual anomaly transposes Brad and Ginger's bodies. The following morning, the pair experience a plethora of emotions from outrage to anger to confusion.

Now dependent on each other after the bizarre, supernatural occurrence, the pair resolve to make the best of their new situation. Though there are aspects of their transformed state they like, the challenges are enormous, beginning with Brad's next day meeting to receive his big promotion. Can Ginger, who is now Brad, pull off a Brad impersonation? And can Brad, in Ginger's body, get hired as Ginger's secretary?

But when the big boss gets a look at Ginger, he wants her for himself.
 

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stevenremington said:
Here it is: :D

A chance encounter leads Wall Street banker, Brad Fairchild to take gorgeous escort, Ginger Allen out on the town to help celebrate his promotion. Spending the night in a Manhattan hotel suite, a spiritual anomaly transposes Brad and Ginger's bodies. The following morning, the pair experience a plethora of emotions from outrage to anger to confusion.

Now dependent on each other after the bizarre, supernatural occurrence, the pair resolve to make the best of their new situation. Though there are aspects of their transformed state they like, the challenges are enormous, beginning with Brad's next day meeting to receive his big promotion. Can Ginger, who is now Brad, pull off a Brad impersonation? And can Brad, in Ginger's body, get hired as Ginger's secretary?

But when the big boss gets a look at Ginger, he wants her for himself.
Hey Steve, you make some good points. I like it.
 

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stevenremington said:
Actually I'm interested now in reading it haha :p
Would you like a copy? You tried to help. I have no problem giving it to you. Just tell me what format you read and whether you prefer regular or erotic version.
 
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