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New takes!
Wifey and I worked on this. I have bought the book that was mentioned and have read half of it and am working partly off of that, and partly off of just taking a fresh angle on it.
Here are a few new takes Wifey and I came up with. Let us know which ones you like, which ones you hate, if you have a favorite, etc.
And if you have any further feedback and advice, please go for it!
Thank you all so much for your help!
Take 2:
Original post:
Hi guys!
This time I'm here for my wifey's blurb! Her story is Space Opera.
I know the blurb we have right now is long. She has an idea, and she thinks it could be intriguing and draw attention, but we wanted to see what you guys have to say about it.
This story has a lot of characters, but the "Main characters" are these three. This blurb is pretty similar in a lot of ways to what Brandon Sanderson's blurb for "The Way of Kings" looks like, and I'd say that my wife's book has some similarities in that there are three major characters who will be followed and thus, who you need to know something about.
Take 1
Wifey and I worked on this. I have bought the book that was mentioned and have read half of it and am working partly off of that, and partly off of just taking a fresh angle on it.
Here are a few new takes Wifey and I came up with. Let us know which ones you like, which ones you hate, if you have a favorite, etc.
Thank you all so much for your help!
Take 2:
Take 3:"Don't look her in the eyes. You can't appear weak, but you can't seem aggressive, either. We can't afford any mistakes - one wrong move could set her off."
Prisoner 286 is a notorious convict, infamous for her many spectacular escapes from Altairan custody. The Altairan government has one final plan to bring her under control, but even they doubt its chance of success - and the survival of the one woman willing to attempt it.
"Tell me, traveller, have you heard of the sacking of Scavenger's Rest? I was there. I saw the gleam of armor, the shadow of arrows raining from the sky."
Branwen Hawke is a war veteran, a survivor from a pre-industrial world who violates her culture's taboos and seeks refuge among the stars. But now, destiny seems to be forcing her back into what thrills her and disgusts her the most - the art of conflict.
Handed an unlikely crew consisting of a pilot cut off from her home, an engineer with crippling anxiety, an innocent-seeming young medic, and a notorious criminal and her handler, Branwen must find a way to not only keep them together, but to thrive. While rescuing the lives that inevitably fall into her hands.
Take 4:Prisoner 286 is a notorious convict, infamous for her many spectacular escapes from Altairan custody. The Altairan government has one final plan to bring her under control, but even they doubt its chance of success - and the survival of the one woman willing to attempt it.
Branwen Hawke is a war veteran, a survivor from a pre-industrial world who violates her culture's taboos and seeks refuge among the stars. But now, destiny seems to be forcing her back into what thrills her and disgusts her the most - the art of conflict.
Merlo is a pilot and student in an experimental, advanced training program. But she is lost, the only one from her distant planet. She searches for allies, while battling self-doubts about her past and those who stranded her.
Branwen finds herself captain of a starship, with an unlikely crew: an overly anxious engineer, a stranded pilot, an innocent medic, and a notorious villain and her handler. She seeks to find a way to not only keep them together, but to successfully complete a mission that could set her ship's reputation. But when lives fall unexpectedly into her hands, can she save them?
---Branwen Hawke left behind the swords and castles of her homeworld to take solace from her lifetime of warfare. Now the captain of a one-of-a-kind starship and an unlikely crew, she must find a way to keep it together and thrive. But even with a lifetime of leading armies and governing lands, Branwen has her hands full with a lost pilot from a distant world, an engineer with crippling anxiety, an innocent-seeming young medic, a Lady of the Guild, and the notorious criminal in the Lady's care. Now tasked with an important mission that could make the crew's reputation, Branwen must face her inner turmoil and find peace despite the struggles she can't escape, while safeguarding the lives that inevitably fall into her hands.
Original post:
Hi guys!
This time I'm here for my wifey's blurb! Her story is Space Opera.
I know the blurb we have right now is long. She has an idea, and she thinks it could be intriguing and draw attention, but we wanted to see what you guys have to say about it.
This story has a lot of characters, but the "Main characters" are these three. This blurb is pretty similar in a lot of ways to what Brandon Sanderson's blurb for "The Way of Kings" looks like, and I'd say that my wife's book has some similarities in that there are three major characters who will be followed and thus, who you need to know something about.
Take 1
"Don't look her in the eyes. You can't be aggressive, but you mustn't appear weak. Show neither arrogance nor superiority. But if you seem too kind, indifferent, or avoidant, she may mistake it for weakness. We can't afford any mistakes - one wrong move could set her off."
Prisoner 286 is one of the most notorious convicts in recent history, and the results of her many escapes from Altairan custody are both spectacular and legendary. The Altairan government has one final plan, a desperate, last-ditch effort to bring her under control, but even they doubt whether anyone can work with the powerful Kinetic well enough to make the plan succeed - and survive the attempt.
"Tell me, traveller, have you heard of the sacking of Scavenger's Rest? I was there. I saw the gleam of armor, the shadow of arrows raining from the sky - and let me tell you, I barely survived to speak of it."
Branwen Hawke is a veteran warrior, a survivor of multiple campaigns across a pre-industrial world. Desperate to escape her past, she violated her culture's taboos and sought refuge in the stars. Now the captain of her own starship, destiny seems intent on forcing her back towards what both thrills her and disgusts her the most - the art of conflict.
"We have one chance. When that slipknot opens, one ship goes through and the people on it must be the best we have. If they fail, all is lost."
Merlo is a lost pilot, the student with the most potential from an experimental, highly advanced training program. However, she's cut off from her people, the only one from her planet in this side of the galaxy. Carving out a place for herself involves finding allies and friends, while battling doubts about herself, her past, and the ones who left her stranded here.