This thread originally asked for feedback on a possible cover and blurb, but I decided to go in a different direction and have removed them. Thanks to all who chimed in!
Thanks Carol. I guess this is all over the place.Carol Davis said:I'm guessing that for budget reasons, you want to stick to making your own cover?
The story seems to be about Shelby -- about that one particular character. Which would push me toward putting a solemn-looking woman in a uniform on the cover, because you want the cover to tell the reader immediately what kind of story this is. (It's not about the rescue, it's about Shelby's struggle to regain her position.)
For the same reason, I'd tweak the title to something different.
If I looked at the cover with no background information (no blurb, no genre listing), I'd guess it's about a team that performs rescues in the Everglades, which isn't what the story is -- so readers clicking on your link thinking they'll find a sort of true-life recounting of a series of adventures with this team will end up being disappointed. You want readers looking for the story of a struggling but ultimately successful female soldier.
I hope that helps!
I just like making them. I'm willing to get someone to make them, though. On this cover, it signifies a scene in the book. Maybe it signifies more like you say a team performing rescues in the Everglades. But I think the blurb you read is more misleading than the cover.I'm guessing that for budget reasons, you want to stick to making your own cover?
Thanks Imawriter. I didn't realize how messed up this is.ImaWriter said:I haven't read any of your other threads so I'm looking at this just as a new prospective reader.
And if I were said reader, I would be completely confused. Nothing matches. First, I have no clue what your genre is. Your blurb doesn't really tell me. And what I suspect you might be wanting to convey in it in no way matches your cover, your title, or even your series name.
As Carol said, if your story is about this woman's harrowing journey to get her position back, the cover is completely wrong.
As your prospective reader, I wouldn't buy the book because I have no clue what to expect. All the signals that should tell me are sending me in different directions.
ETA. I think this is much different from what you usually write and what your readers have probably come to expect. If that is the case, you really need to lock this down and clearly identify what this book is--cover/title/blurb/series--and that it's different from previous books.
That's what I'm trying to do. Anyway, I had a vastly different blurb that fit the cover better. Here it is.you really need to lock this down and clearly identify what this book is--cover/title/blurb/series--and that it's different from previous books.
Greg, I get why you want to do your own covers. It's a level of control I want with my own books. Although it comes with big compromises the payoff is you get better and better at it and as an indie you can change your cover whenever you want. I messed about with your blurb and came up with this.Gregg Bell said:...
The US president's seven-year-old nephew has been kidnapped. The nation is horrified, but the crime turns out to be just the break that disgraced former Navy SEALs Shelby Ryder and Earl Bernstein need. If they're able to rescue the boy, who's being held somewhere in the Florida Everglades, the president assures them he'll restore their SEAL trident pins. But something's not right. The president could send massive forces for the boy, but instead he's sending them. Support people don't show. Others won't reveal their names. Many seem more mercenary than military. Shelby and Earl are suspicious, but they're desperate to be SEALs again, and there's an innocent little boy out there in need of rescue. And so, into the depths of the humid, alligator-infested Everglades they go, to start a mission they were never intended to survive.
Maybe it still needs work but this blurb is my story. I gravitated to the other blurb from several suggestions people made. Think the cover is a fit with this blurb/story? And yes, the cover, blurb and everything is vastly different than the previous series.